6.12.2008

June Evening



Her skin was buttermilk soft nestled in his neck,
as she lay there trying to imitate his breathing.
Thoughts float in the breeze from one subject to the next.
Curtains rustle and windchimes sing.
Frogs and crickets conduct a symphony.
A velvet sky holds priceless diamonds,
that an unknown jeweler has placed there.
The universe smiles and nods in approval.

18 comments:

Billy said...

Tina, I love this poem, especially the ending--the unknown jeweler and the universe smiling in approval. Great work!!!

Cynthia said...

So beautifully romantic!

gingatao said...

Wonderful, tender, the moment captured like being there and strangely even though she is not described at all, one gets a sense of who she is, gorgeously beautiful.

Bubba said...

Sometimes the afterglow far outweighs all else. Beautiful and profound...

mariacristina said...

i love the opening verses, so human, so easily imagined the way you express this moment. Nice poem for a June evening.

Jo said...

A beautiful vignette, Tina, really moved me.

Mimi said...

beautiful description of a sweet, cool June evening...

Mortina said...

Your poetry is very gentle, I was moved by the tribute
Stacey 2.

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gingatao said...

Ahh, that is nice to see more people reading your beautiful poems, Tina. I read this one again and it is exquisite, there is something truely magical in it that I can't quite see, behind the poem, it is gorgeous,

Tina Trivett said...

Thank you all so much for the kind comments. :)

vaniz said...

wow, wow, wow! :)

mrs. sarah ott said...

you've got me stargazed. this is so tender. the imitation of breathing thing...oh i always do that.

lol.

love it.

Mary P said...

A beautiful poem that captures the breathtaking moment of realising a love. I'm glad Paul highlighted this... a wonderful thing to read on a Sunday morning... I read it as his music started and it fitted perfectly with the intro.

one more believer said...

coming by way of paul's link, it is a beauty of poem.. those wonderful moments under cover od darkness... trying to imitate his breathing ..priceless...

lissa said...

love all the images in this. great tone and delivery.

HarryC13 said...

Hi Tina, your poetry is beautiful, and this to me is the best of all. Have you tried submitting to Bottle of Smoke Press? They do beautiful work and I'll bet Bill Roberts would love your stuff. They're at bospress.com, and please tell Bill that Harry Calhoun sent you. Again, I really like your work.

Tina Trivett said...

Thanks a million Harry! Will definitely check it out.