There is perfect timing in the phrasing, I swear I could hear those dice jumping and rolling and coming to a stop and then her father's voice just sprang out in the last two lines. More evidence of the real magic in your exquisite poetry, Tina.
Yes, indeed... so much of poetry, at least for me, lies in the sound. Plus, 'Baby just got a new pair of shoes' shows a level of understanding that lends an air of authenticity, since it's a phrase one wouldn't expect to come out of the mouth of a child unless she had first-hand knowledge. Rather sad, actually...Plus, the first line portends something troubling to come... just a wonderful piece of work. Thanks for sharing it with us.
such a little gem. so few words, but the ones used are incredibly evocative. fine work.
Thank you all for the kind comments. I appreciate you taking the time to read my ramblings ;)
I finally caught up on your poetry that I have missed for a while...I do so enjoy your work...Blessings to you and thanks for sharing your talent...Mimi